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Beyond all sights the world could show,
Above the things that money could own,
Out of the reach that power could grant,
Amongst every challenge in which knowledge can tramp,
Past the time a clock could tick,
Away from the grave mortality gives,
Without precious attention only fame beholds,
Despite all the things that I betrothe,
Far from these is the love that I miss,
Within my wants I dream of nothing but this.
This is a poem I wrote about a year ago. It started out with a simple assignment to write a prepositional phrase poem (hence, each line begins with a prepositional phrase) on a "difficult/unique" topic. The poem I handed in had to be cut down a lot (I didn't understand the "simple" part of the assignment o3o'), but this is the original one I first drafted...

Comment (please? ^^) on what you think this means, and don't worry if your interpretation is different from others. 8D I'd love to see how others see this.

Art © by Citrus Lisp
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EliwoodLewring Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's talking about something that's higher than all of this. But it isn't talking about god, at least not to me.
I dunno. True love is the closest I can think of.

Damn straight you're better than ME at poetry, though. I suck at writing poems or anything of the sort. xD
Also, lol @ overcomplicating assignments just b/c you think if you don't you'll get a bad grade, amirite? o3o
CitrusLisp Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
OSM interpretation~ 8DDD I like. :3 And yup, it's not talking about any god/goddess... at least that's what I thought while I was writing it. X3

XD lol thanks ^^' I love poems 8D They're just so... OSM... Like a special form of art that the longest novel, the most beautiful picture, or the OSMest piece of music can never imitate. 8D One style I'm meh with is free verse. It has no flow or rhythm, but some free verse poems are OSM anyway. :3
EliwoodLewring Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So I was right in a way, but not right in another way? o3o weeird.

I'm honestly not that big of a poetry guy, considering everything. It's not that I don't like it truly, I just never really got interested in it as much unless it's something like this poem you wrote. Even then I'm nonchalant about it and not really enthused to the MAX. Still, poems are pretty darn cool in any respect.
CitrusLisp Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
-shrug- I think that when you interpret art, there's no right or wrong answer. X3 lol that made me feel wise. o3o

I will convert you... oAo Join the poem fanclub... NAO X3 lol.
EliwoodLewring Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That can be said of half of what is taught to you in school. Srsly. ANYTHING in English or literature class that is a writing assignment of some sort can always be interpreted in more than two ways. It irritates me that what I write in class doesn't always get a good grade because the teachers don't understand what I meant. :l

Conversion is hard to do to me, my beliefs are sketchy as it is when it comes to nonsensicality. Wait... no they're not. Nevermind, I'm nutty. Poem fanclub... naaaaaah. Fanclubs ain't my style, they ain't how I roll. Because they see me trollin, they hatin. xD
CitrusLisp Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
D: So true~ Yea my teacher used to tell me that there's more than one answer, but it still has to be a good answer and have enough support... or else they won't understand. XP

XDDD LOL. Trolls will troll on. :3
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